Hi Lochie. I think you are fishing, using that hashtag. You are fishing for compliments. I know that this speech was very entertaining and you shared some of the magic of having siblings. To improve it you needed to share some more anecdotes (truly funny/meaningful ones). The anecdote you shared about Jed faking being injured was great. More stories like that would improve the content of your speech.
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ReplyDeleteHi Lochie. I think you are fishing, using that hashtag. You are fishing for compliments. I know that this speech was very entertaining and you shared some of the magic of having siblings. To improve it you needed to share some more anecdotes (truly funny/meaningful ones). The anecdote you shared about Jed faking being injured was great. More stories like that would improve the content of your speech.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Mr McAulay